Umm....
there's a real lack of interesting stuff going on here.
the beat is boring, and then changes to very clumsy and off beat.
the synths are really, really repetative.
there's no real ending, it just fades out, which isn't great.
the beggining, with the voice synth, is pretty dumb sounding added to the beat.
one good thing was the first lead synth that came in, but then that was repeated to death.
i can't say how much time went into this, but it really doesn't sound like much did at all. so try spending more time on these things.